Hello everyone! These are just first 3 chapters from 15. Read it , please and post your comments! More in down of the story.
Chapter 1 – The unkown place
Stranger wakes up in an unknown to him, place in the desert, completely alone. He had light black and grey clothes and a black cloak with grey knight simbol on it. First, what comes into his head is to get to one of desert hills and have a look around. On the way to the hill, he starts to remember why he is in the desert and why his clothes are dirty with someone’s blood. It just takes a moment, until stranger is on the hill and all memories come back. The day, when stranger and his best friend were walking in Ashanvale forest. Something was spying them, something with red eyes. The only thing he can remember next was that his best friend was killed by an unknown gun and he got punched from behind. First feeling that came to him on the hill, was the desire for revenge for his best friend, but how he can do something in the Desert, without knowing where he is and where to go? He looked around, it was completely alone country, nothing more than sand and a raven in up of his head, waiting for time, when stranger will fall of the tiredness … It is second day, stranger has lost almost all his strength.. In last hope, he saw a camp and tried to run to the camp, but his legs wouldn’t listen, his voice was very quiet, he fell and lost control… Now his life is in hands of God.
Chapter 2 – The safers of stranger's life
It is typical camp with 8 scout towers, medicine hall, sleeping hall for padawans and jedis,special sleeping hall for jedi knights , training hall and hall for Commanders. ( And ofcoures with WCs ).
Lessa and Templar just woke up in special sleeping hall. It didnt take long time to Lessa and Templar dressed into their special clothes with black, light blue and grey colours with Jedi Knight tags on shoulders. When they dressed up, they had to check if everything is ok around the camp. They went out from the special sleeping hall, through training hall to the scout towers. “Cant wait next week, it is horrible to be asleep and go to check arounding so early morning“ Told Templar himself . In few seconds, while being on scout tower, they together saw a human close to them. It seems he slept. “ Let’s go and check, what we can do for this stranger” Said Lessa. Lessa and Templar go to the stranger. When more they were to the stranger, more they were worring if the stranger is alive or not.“ I hope this stranger is still with us on the earth“ Though Lessa. Finally they came to the stranger, Templar listened to his heart, if it is still alive and looked in his face.
“ He lost his control, his face shows, that he didn’t eat and drink very long time. Let’s take him to our camp and try to help him” Told Templar and then to himself : “ He has a big luck, that we saw him”. “Ok. I think it is the most we can do for him at this moment” Answered Lessa. They puted body of stranger on one of the beds in medical room, puted glass of water and few sandwiches with butter and cheese for him for time, when he wakes up. “ It will be interesting to hear, who this stranger is and what he was doing at the desert“ Though Templar.
Chapter 3 – Waking up
First, the stranger opened his eyes. He couldn’t believe he is still alive and in some room, when just few hours ago he lost control in the desert. He wanted to know where he is, so stranger looked around. There were strange water and laser healing mashines, armors, health packs to take. “I never though that such a hyper technology exist“Told stranger to himself. After looking around stranger saw the drink and sandwiches on the table next to him, so he drank and ate to get a strength and mind back to normal after so much hours walking in desert. “ Where I am and who safed my life? I hope I am between humans “ Though stranger. After eating and drinking, stranger looked on the mashines, whitch he saw first time and took 1 health pack, as he though that it comes in hand. After looking on such unknown mashines to him, stranger went straight to the doors on right side of the medical room. It was training room for duels with wooden sabers. In this room stranger saw 2 unknown humans to him. “ Thank you God, that I am between humans “ Said to himself the stranger. “ Oh. Good morning stranger. Welcome to our camp in Margadel desert.” Said Templar. “ Hello stranger. What can we do for you and what brought you to this country? “ Asked Lessa. The stranger was looking on the faces of unknown to him people. After he heard the question from Lessa he told : “ Hello. I am sorry ,but i dont remember my name. I was in the desert, as I woke up there and have no idea how I got there. Could you tell me your names to let me know, with who I have a honour to talk, please?”
Chapter 4 - Familiaritaion
“Hello stranger. My name is Templar. I am Jedi Knight. Welcome to the camp of KR“ Said Templar. “Hello stranger. My name is Lessa and i am Jedi Knight too. Templar is my brother“ Said Lessa. “ It is great to know you two. Don’t you know who safed my life? And could i join, please? I have nowhere to go, i am completly lost and my best friend died about 1 week ago in Ashenvale forest“ Said stranger with sad voice and with drops on face. “ Me and my brother Templar saw you lieing on the sand from our scout tower. You have a luck, that you were close to our camp, stranger. It is sad to hear that you lost your best friend in Ashenvale forest.“ Said Lessa. In this minute a woman in gold decorated clothes, star on each shoulder and with 2 sabers decorated by gold too. While this woman was coming to stranger, Templar and Lessa, Templar and Lessa already were staying with right hand at head and told: “Good morning, Leader!“. “ Good morning Lessa and Templar, is everything clear around our camp?“ Answered Leader and then said : “ And who are you, stranger? What brought you to our camp? And my name is Fluffy“. “ Good morning Fluffy. I am sorry , but i dont remember my name. I am there thank to Lessa and Templar, as they safed my life. I have nowhere to go, i have lost best friend and have no idea where i am. So i would like to join, if it is possible, please.“ Answered stranger on Fluffy’s question. “ It is sad to hear. Welcome to our camp, stranger. If you want to join, you will have to duel me. Do you have saber with you?“ Asked Fluffy . “I am very sorry, but i have no saber with me. But fighting with sabers is deadly….“ Answered stranger . “We dont use sabers in duel there, here, take wooden saber. It is completly safe.“ Said Fluffy and bowed. “ Thank you very much. As you wish, Fluffy“ Said stranger and bowed too. Lessa and Templar moved behind the line and started watching the duel. After sirion and Fluffy bowed, stranger with one wooden saber and Fluffy with 2 wooden sabers were dueling. It was very long duel and at end, it ended draw. “ He isnt bad. If
We train him, he can be a great fighter, but i dont think that he can be close to be as Nintendo“ Though Fluffy. At this moment almost the same though Lessa and Templar and they were glad too. Only stranger was worring and waiting for answer. After a while Fluffy said :“You arent bad fighter and after traning by our briliant teachers you can be a great fighter. You are in and be welcomed in our temporary camp. But firstly you need to get a name“ . “ I dont have enough thanks to you Fluffy and to Lessa and Templar, whitch safed my life. I hope i will can sometime pay back the godness you all brought me. I dont have any idea of my name now“ With smile and happines on face said stranger. “What do you think about name Sirion?“ In the same time asked Lessa and Templar. “I think it is great name, i will take it. By it i will forever remember you two, safers of my life“ Answered from this time a stranger with name Sirion. After duel and converstaion, Lessa and Templar showed Sirion their temporary camp. After it Sirion went to the sleeping hall and slept, as he was very tired after so much things, whitch happened so fast. Who know what did Fluffy, Lessa, Templar did at the time, while Sirion was sleeping.
It is just the start. Write you comments, please! If i write it goodly, i will write next 8-10 chapters. ( I will, only if people like it.. As do something for nothing.... )
Thank you for reading,
Sirion
Chapter 1 – The unkown place
Stranger wakes up in an unknown to him, place in the desert, completely alone. He had light black and grey clothes and a black cloak with grey knight simbol on it. First, what comes into his head is to get to one of desert hills and have a look around. On the way to the hill, he starts to remember why he is in the desert and why his clothes are dirty with someone’s blood. It just takes a moment, until stranger is on the hill and all memories come back. The day, when stranger and his best friend were walking in Ashanvale forest. Something was spying them, something with red eyes. The only thing he can remember next was that his best friend was killed by an unknown gun and he got punched from behind. First feeling that came to him on the hill, was the desire for revenge for his best friend, but how he can do something in the Desert, without knowing where he is and where to go? He looked around, it was completely alone country, nothing more than sand and a raven in up of his head, waiting for time, when stranger will fall of the tiredness … It is second day, stranger has lost almost all his strength.. In last hope, he saw a camp and tried to run to the camp, but his legs wouldn’t listen, his voice was very quiet, he fell and lost control… Now his life is in hands of God.
Chapter 2 – The safers of stranger's life
It is typical camp with 8 scout towers, medicine hall, sleeping hall for padawans and jedis,special sleeping hall for jedi knights , training hall and hall for Commanders. ( And ofcoures with WCs ).
Lessa and Templar just woke up in special sleeping hall. It didnt take long time to Lessa and Templar dressed into their special clothes with black, light blue and grey colours with Jedi Knight tags on shoulders. When they dressed up, they had to check if everything is ok around the camp. They went out from the special sleeping hall, through training hall to the scout towers. “Cant wait next week, it is horrible to be asleep and go to check arounding so early morning“ Told Templar himself . In few seconds, while being on scout tower, they together saw a human close to them. It seems he slept. “ Let’s go and check, what we can do for this stranger” Said Lessa. Lessa and Templar go to the stranger. When more they were to the stranger, more they were worring if the stranger is alive or not.“ I hope this stranger is still with us on the earth“ Though Lessa. Finally they came to the stranger, Templar listened to his heart, if it is still alive and looked in his face.
“ He lost his control, his face shows, that he didn’t eat and drink very long time. Let’s take him to our camp and try to help him” Told Templar and then to himself : “ He has a big luck, that we saw him”. “Ok. I think it is the most we can do for him at this moment” Answered Lessa. They puted body of stranger on one of the beds in medical room, puted glass of water and few sandwiches with butter and cheese for him for time, when he wakes up. “ It will be interesting to hear, who this stranger is and what he was doing at the desert“ Though Templar.
Chapter 3 – Waking up
First, the stranger opened his eyes. He couldn’t believe he is still alive and in some room, when just few hours ago he lost control in the desert. He wanted to know where he is, so stranger looked around. There were strange water and laser healing mashines, armors, health packs to take. “I never though that such a hyper technology exist“Told stranger to himself. After looking around stranger saw the drink and sandwiches on the table next to him, so he drank and ate to get a strength and mind back to normal after so much hours walking in desert. “ Where I am and who safed my life? I hope I am between humans “ Though stranger. After eating and drinking, stranger looked on the mashines, whitch he saw first time and took 1 health pack, as he though that it comes in hand. After looking on such unknown mashines to him, stranger went straight to the doors on right side of the medical room. It was training room for duels with wooden sabers. In this room stranger saw 2 unknown humans to him. “ Thank you God, that I am between humans “ Said to himself the stranger. “ Oh. Good morning stranger. Welcome to our camp in Margadel desert.” Said Templar. “ Hello stranger. What can we do for you and what brought you to this country? “ Asked Lessa. The stranger was looking on the faces of unknown to him people. After he heard the question from Lessa he told : “ Hello. I am sorry ,but i dont remember my name. I was in the desert, as I woke up there and have no idea how I got there. Could you tell me your names to let me know, with who I have a honour to talk, please?”
Chapter 4 - Familiaritaion
“Hello stranger. My name is Templar. I am Jedi Knight. Welcome to the camp of KR“ Said Templar. “Hello stranger. My name is Lessa and i am Jedi Knight too. Templar is my brother“ Said Lessa. “ It is great to know you two. Don’t you know who safed my life? And could i join, please? I have nowhere to go, i am completly lost and my best friend died about 1 week ago in Ashenvale forest“ Said stranger with sad voice and with drops on face. “ Me and my brother Templar saw you lieing on the sand from our scout tower. You have a luck, that you were close to our camp, stranger. It is sad to hear that you lost your best friend in Ashenvale forest.“ Said Lessa. In this minute a woman in gold decorated clothes, star on each shoulder and with 2 sabers decorated by gold too. While this woman was coming to stranger, Templar and Lessa, Templar and Lessa already were staying with right hand at head and told: “Good morning, Leader!“. “ Good morning Lessa and Templar, is everything clear around our camp?“ Answered Leader and then said : “ And who are you, stranger? What brought you to our camp? And my name is Fluffy“. “ Good morning Fluffy. I am sorry , but i dont remember my name. I am there thank to Lessa and Templar, as they safed my life. I have nowhere to go, i have lost best friend and have no idea where i am. So i would like to join, if it is possible, please.“ Answered stranger on Fluffy’s question. “ It is sad to hear. Welcome to our camp, stranger. If you want to join, you will have to duel me. Do you have saber with you?“ Asked Fluffy . “I am very sorry, but i have no saber with me. But fighting with sabers is deadly….“ Answered stranger . “We dont use sabers in duel there, here, take wooden saber. It is completly safe.“ Said Fluffy and bowed. “ Thank you very much. As you wish, Fluffy“ Said stranger and bowed too. Lessa and Templar moved behind the line and started watching the duel. After sirion and Fluffy bowed, stranger with one wooden saber and Fluffy with 2 wooden sabers were dueling. It was very long duel and at end, it ended draw. “ He isnt bad. If
We train him, he can be a great fighter, but i dont think that he can be close to be as Nintendo“ Though Fluffy. At this moment almost the same though Lessa and Templar and they were glad too. Only stranger was worring and waiting for answer. After a while Fluffy said :“You arent bad fighter and after traning by our briliant teachers you can be a great fighter. You are in and be welcomed in our temporary camp. But firstly you need to get a name“ . “ I dont have enough thanks to you Fluffy and to Lessa and Templar, whitch safed my life. I hope i will can sometime pay back the godness you all brought me. I dont have any idea of my name now“ With smile and happines on face said stranger. “What do you think about name Sirion?“ In the same time asked Lessa and Templar. “I think it is great name, i will take it. By it i will forever remember you two, safers of my life“ Answered from this time a stranger with name Sirion. After duel and converstaion, Lessa and Templar showed Sirion their temporary camp. After it Sirion went to the sleeping hall and slept, as he was very tired after so much things, whitch happened so fast. Who know what did Fluffy, Lessa, Templar did at the time, while Sirion was sleeping.
It is just the start. Write you comments, please! If i write it goodly, i will write next 8-10 chapters. ( I will, only if people like it.. As do something for nothing.... )
Thank you for reading,
Sirion
Last edited by Wolferion on Sun Dec 10, 2006 8:47 am, edited 9 times in total.
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It is constructed on what really happened, just making it looking in other way =D ... It was a stupid nick name i had , when played 1st day JKA 
Very thank you. Will work on next chapters soon and will update the first ones, as i got my nickname by 2 briliant masters and... ( Lessa and Templar know ) ^^